0:00 - nice titles. You will need to use titles when you do your final project, and it's something we'll be looking at next week.
0:07 - this is a rather useful establishing shot. I like the washed-out colour (did you desaturate?) Very impressive location. You possibly hold it for a little long (could do with a range of shots being evident) but it works to a certain extent
0:21 - not so sure about the transition you've used here - would probably be better as a straight cut?
0:25 - you've used some good framing, although as mentioned above I think you might benefit from being a little more adventurous with the range of shots you've used
0:41 - don't forget - a cross-dissolve generally denotes that some time has passed whereas straight cuts imply a continuous chain of events; I think again a cut would be better here
0:45 - I like the framing using the arch here
1:03 - I think a little more judicious editing would help build up the tension a little more, although as mentioned, both locations and framing are very good
1:20 - you hold this shot following the character for quite a long time - not sure about the use of movement here. Bear in mind that you are using quite a fast-paced track which does not quite fit with the slower pace of the editing.
1:42 - I like the way you've framed the garage door - good timing with the entry (and the continuity looks pretty good as well)
2:20 - the framing here and the use of the torch are good, although I would have liked to see a range of shots; I don't think you've used one CU in the whole sequence
2:35 - seems to be a slight glitch here
Overall, I'm impressed with the amount of effort you went into, particularly putting together the team and organising the shoot and location, which was the primary aim of the task. I think you can afford to be a little more adventurous in the actual shooting (try to look at exploring a range of angles) and don't be scared to edit more tightly.
Thank you very much for your feedback, much appreciated! at 0:07 I used an effect called 'Vignette', which slightly darkens the edges of the frame, giving it a more eerie look. At 0:21 I used the 'cross blur' transition to show that time had passed, as the path that no. 2 had been walking along had been quite long, so that was deliberate. At 0:41 I deliberately used a 'cross dissolve' to show that no. 2 had been walking for a while and it shows a switch in location as he is know walking from an arch, showing that time had passed. I can see what you mean at 1:20. After watching it back, I can see where I could have used different angles here to make it more adventurous/easier to watch. I did actually film a CU shot, however I didn't use it. It was where no. 2 was saying "information, information, INFORMATION", but the lighting of that footage wasn't good, so I didn't use it in the final production. At 2:35, I had to use two different parts of footage to make it sound/look better, however I wasn't sure how to make it run more smoothly there - maybe you may know? But, apart from that, thank you very much. I will bare in mind all feedback when I come to filming my next piece :))
Can't get it to work in school... Will take a look when I get home. Well done for meeting the deadline.
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Thank you very much! You're funny :))
ReplyDelete0:00 - nice titles. You will need to use titles when you do your final project, and it's something we'll be looking at next week.
ReplyDelete0:07 - this is a rather useful establishing shot. I like the washed-out colour (did you desaturate?) Very impressive location. You possibly hold it for a little long (could do with a range of shots being evident) but it works to a certain extent
0:21 - not so sure about the transition you've used here - would probably be better as a straight cut?
0:25 - you've used some good framing, although as mentioned above I think you might benefit from being a little more adventurous with the range of shots you've used
0:41 - don't forget - a cross-dissolve generally denotes that some time has passed whereas straight cuts imply a continuous chain of events; I think again a cut would be better here
0:45 - I like the framing using the arch here
1:03 - I think a little more judicious editing would help build up the tension a little more, although as mentioned, both locations and framing are very good
1:20 - you hold this shot following the character for quite a long time - not sure about the use of movement here. Bear in mind that you are using quite a fast-paced track which does not quite fit with the slower pace of the editing.
1:42 - I like the way you've framed the garage door - good timing with the entry (and the continuity looks pretty good as well)
2:20 - the framing here and the use of the torch are good, although I would have liked to see a range of shots; I don't think you've used one CU in the whole sequence
2:35 - seems to be a slight glitch here
Overall, I'm impressed with the amount of effort you went into, particularly putting together the team and organising the shoot and location, which was the primary aim of the task. I think you can afford to be a little more adventurous in the actual shooting (try to look at exploring a range of angles) and don't be scared to edit more tightly.
This is a good piece - well done.
Thank you very much for your feedback, much appreciated! at 0:07 I used an effect called 'Vignette', which slightly darkens the edges of the frame, giving it a more eerie look. At 0:21 I used the 'cross blur' transition to show that time had passed, as the path that no. 2 had been walking along had been quite long, so that was deliberate. At 0:41 I deliberately used a 'cross dissolve' to show that no. 2 had been walking for a while and it shows a switch in location as he is know walking from an arch, showing that time had passed. I can see what you mean at 1:20. After watching it back, I can see where I could have used different angles here to make it more adventurous/easier to watch. I did actually film a CU shot, however I didn't use it. It was where no. 2 was saying "information, information, INFORMATION", but the lighting of that footage wasn't good, so I didn't use it in the final production. At 2:35, I had to use two different parts of footage to make it sound/look better, however I wasn't sure how to make it run more smoothly there - maybe you may know? But, apart from that, thank you very much. I will bare in mind all feedback when I come to filming my next piece :))
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